The most important part of an essay is the Thesis

The Thesis sets the foundation for the essay. Unfortunately if you have a bad thesis then entire essay can be off. The thesis needs to introduce all topics that are going to be dicussed throughout the essay. If the thesis is too general and doesn't specify then everything in the essay will seem pulled out of mid air and won't have any meaning or any way to connection back to the original purpose. The thesis in A2 is a good thesis because it goes in depth enough to explain all the main points of the essay and introduces what she is about to explain and how is connects and makes the point.