Essay Comments

I think I improved on the weaknesses from my last essay but still need to work on a couple things. In this essay I should have made my thesis more specific in order to not keep the reading waiting. For my claims and analysis I need more textual evidence to support my point. The biggest correction that needs to be made is that I need to completely answer the question and not stray off topic. However I improved my topic sentences from the last essay and hope to continue to do better.